

My dad 'name is pan xing ming. He'a doctor. l love you , but he love me too. My mun is a nurse she's thirty一five. My is student. we three people in the family . we very happy.
On sunday morning ,l like playbasketball with my frend. One day l with my frend play basketball. in the playground we are very happy.l love my friend .
l love my family ,l love myfriend l like play football.
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896343892 的点评 打分:1 分 点评时间:2008-7-16 18:42:57
· 语病,注意哟!
艾研 的点评 打分:1 分 点评时间:2008-7-16 18:16:07
· 错误太多多的数不清列!好好学学语法!


